Exercise-Possible Answers
Work in a group of two or three, and discuss what is wrong with each of the following thesis statements. Then revise each thesis to make it more effective.
1. In this paper, I will discuss the causes of asthma, which include exposure to smoke, chemicals, and allergic reactions.
It announces the main point.
Revised: The most common causes of asthma are exposure to allergens and allergic reactions.
2. Jogging is an enjoyable aerobic sport.
It is neither specific nor original.
Revised: Because it requires only a good pair of shoes and a place to run, jogging is one of the easiest aerobic sports to pursue.
3. The crime rate is decreasing in American cities.
This is a fact, not an assertion.
Revised: The crime rate is decreasing in American cities because of more effective policing.
4. Living in an apartment has many advantages.
It is too broad and does not tell what the essay is about.
Revised: Apartment dwellers have the advantages of fewer responsibilities for maintenance than home owners and more opportunities to interact with neighbors.
5. Children’s toys can be dangerous, instructional, or creative.
It does not tell how the points are related.
Revised: Parents should buy toys for their children that encourage creativity.
Work in a group of two or three, and discuss what is wrong with each of the following thesis statements. Then revise each thesis to make it more effective.
1. In this paper, I will discuss the causes of asthma, which include exposure to smoke, chemicals, and allergic reactions.
It announces the main point.
Revised: The most common causes of asthma are exposure to allergens and allergic reactions.
2. Jogging is an enjoyable aerobic sport.
It is neither specific nor original.
Revised: Because it requires only a good pair of shoes and a place to run, jogging is one of the easiest aerobic sports to pursue.
3. The crime rate is decreasing in American cities.
This is a fact, not an assertion.
Revised: The crime rate is decreasing in American cities because of more effective policing.
4. Living in an apartment has many advantages.
It is too broad and does not tell what the essay is about.
Revised: Apartment dwellers have the advantages of fewer responsibilities for maintenance than home owners and more opportunities to interact with neighbors.
5. Children’s toys can be dangerous, instructional, or creative.
It does not tell how the points are related.
Revised: Parents should buy toys for their children that encourage creativity.
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